The map-reader’s search for co-ordinates

I looked under the carpet, but all I found was fluff and floorboards. I looked in the bottom of my glass, but all I found was a watery reflection. I looked in the envelope, but all I found were letters that fell out into perfectly disjointed words. I looked up at the altar, but all I found was a deity suspended on wires. I looked into technology, but all I found were zeroes and ones and dots and dashes. I looked into art, but all I found were strokes. I looked inside books, but all I found were folds. I looked into poetry, but all I found was a b a b c d c d e f e f g g. I looked into newspapers, but all I found were events inconceivable, events inconsequential.

I rifled through your pockets, but all I found were keys. I picked up your telephone, but all I found were keys. I listened to your music, but all I found were keys. I scanned your map, but all I found was a single key. This does mean, however, that I can now understand your strange symbols, your gradients and grids, your concentric lines and haphazard thoughts that lead nowhere except back to the streets of this noble city.

I looked into me, but all I found was air. I looked into you, but all I found was still (more) air. It’s not true that empty vessels make the most noise.

I wish to inform you that I am breathing. I wish to inform you that tomorrow I shall remain breathing. I wish to inform you. I wish to inform. I wish to. I wish. Don’t stop breathing.

Comments: 15

    it’s not nonsensical, more like prettily eloquent.

    kate | 04.21.07, 03:19

    I’m glad you’re breathing.

    isabelle | 04.21.07, 03:41

    Lovely rhythm to your post.

    hellojed | 04.21.07, 09:44

    I never know what to say about your posts
    But I always want to say something, to acknowledge that I read them and appreciate them, even if I don’t often understand them

    anxious | 04.21.07, 12:30

    Looking for meaning.
    Trying to understand.
    Existing. Connecting.

    seahorse | 04.21.07, 15:11

    quite beautiful words.

    andre | 04.21.07, 15:36

    Thank you for such lovely comments, all. I really and truly appreciate them.

    An Unreliable Witness | 04.21.07, 17:33

    Will do. You too.

    clarissa | 04.21.07, 20:05

    Have you thought about writing poems instead?
    I always have this urge to read your posts as if they were poems, so maybe you’d consider this. Just for me. Go on.

    Timbo | 04.21.07, 22:19

    Clarissa - Yes, still am, last time I checked.

    Timbo - Interesting comment, thanks. I have been known to write poetry - quite dire poetry, to be honest - and some of it even turned up in obscure corners of the net many years ago. But nothing since. Oddly, for me, I tend to somehow lose the rhythm of words and resort to very obvious verse rhythms when writing poetry. When I’m writing prose - well, I’ll let you into a little secret: I think about how the words sound, but any sense of rhythm in a piece just kind of … happens.

    An Unreliable Witness | 04.22.07, 01:19

    prose could just be freeformed, unpunctuated poetry…but don’t stop the need to inhale…

    kate | 04.22.07, 01:46

    a short list of the effects your writing has on me:

    (i) leaves me breathless
    (ii) leaves tears in my eyes
    (iii) leaves me wondering what occurs in your mind
    (iv) leaves me speechless in wonder at your words

    mizyake | 04.22.07, 12:50

    I’ve been reading poetry on these pages since An Unreliable Witness first began.

    andre | 04.22.07, 19:26

    Kate & Andre - Sssh. I am prone to blushing in hot weather.

    Mizyake - You, also, are far too kind.

    An Unreliable Witness | 04.22.07, 19:39

    I’m lost but it’s ok. I quite like it —->here.

    Angelalala | 04.23.07, 10:28

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